1.What do you think is the most effective about your draft and why? The most effective thing about my draft is its diversity of intended audience. As the problem discussed here is a multifaceted one, so must be the solution approach. Hence, recommendations for several different stakeholders are provided. 2.What are you most worried about that I should be sure to comment on? There might be many other factors in teen driver’s safety. Considering the short length of the report, only most important recommendations were discussed here. But some important factor might have been overlooked. What do you think about making a concession in the intro and final section, something like “While other alternatives also exist, these…”? 3.What changes or additions are you already planning to make? Before drafting, I was confused about whether I should consider alternatives for a single factor in more depth or a more diverse approach. Since I selected the latter, I’m planning to research more on a single factor, i.e., the solutions that teen drivers can adopt themselves. To: Professor Betsy Cohn From: Hussein Altamimi Date: March 31st, 2024 this won’t be part of your final draft, right? Rough Draft Feasibility Report: Enhancing Teen Drivers' Safety Introduction The legal age of owning a driver’s license in the United States of America varies from 16 to 18 years, while a learner’s license can be obtained after the age of 14. However, several reports point out the dangers involved with teenage driving. For example, the Centers for Disease Control and Prevention (CDC) reported that approximately 2800 teenagers died in vehicle accidents in the USA in 2020, while around 227000 227,000 were injured (CDC, 2022). Furthermore, the risks of road accident-based injuries and fatalities were reported to be higher among the age group of sixteen to nineteen than any other age (CDC, 2022). Thus, in recognition of the crucial need to tackle the risks for the mentioned age group, this article report? How is a report different from an article? provides a feasibility report that explores various strategies to improve driver safety for ages 16 to 19. Several stakeholders can play an effective role in mitigating this problem, such as car manufacturers, driving instructors, parents, and road safety lawmakers (NHTSA National… Administration [write out] (NHTSA), n.d.). Accordingly, this report aims to provide recommendations for the involved parties to enhance road safety for teen drivers. I like how you identify the problem your report focuses on and how clearly you cite the sources. However, the introduction is rushed/incomplete and would be better developed as multiple paragraphs, and I’m unclear on your audience…? Research Methods The study here was conducted using a secondary qualitative approach. Several academic reliable sources from peer-reviewed journals and government and media publications for data on crash reports were studied. The relevant information was selected, where relevancy pertained to specific goals of the report, i.e., providing alternatives to the existing road practices for teenage drivers as well as recommendations for other stakeholders. (1) This method is not reflected in your reference list—a big problem. (2) Slow down your development of this section, whose goal is not only to show that the sources used are relevant but also to show that they’re trustworthy. Apply chap. 10.7 and the HAWKS criteria. Overview of Alternatives Various areas for alternatives or modifications in the existing norms, rules, and laws are proposed don’t jump prematurely to your recommendations to improve drivers' safety specifically for teenagers. These areas include education and instructions, family and community involvement, age-specific road safety and traffic laws, and utilizing advancement in technology for the said objectives. Criteria The main criterion of the alternatives is to reduce road accidents by teen drivers. However, other criteria such as recognizing strengths and weaknesses of teenagers in terms of driving not sure what you mean, influences on drivers’ behaviors, availability of technology, and suitability for youth are also considered. Evolution unclear word choice? Furthermore, evolution criteria include ease and challenges in implementation, economic requirements, and cost-effectiveness [why continue criteria in this section instead of presenting all criteria together in the previous section?]. The strictness of the implementation of traffic laws applicable now as well as those that are recommended is reviewed to understand the feasibility of implementation of the alternatives. Conclusions Road mishaps involving teenage drivers do not affect just the driver, ; rather there are many factors that are involved. Driving student’s students’ understanding of the traffic rules, instructor’s instructors’ ability to convey all the necessary information, traffic police officer’s alertness and adherence to the rules, lawmakers’ understanding of society and individual’s road psychology are all part of the process that ends up making difference between life and death. Thus, each stakeholder has a responsibility to ensure the safety of everyone on the road. Recommendations You have interesting ideas below, but you are not ready to propose them. Instead, even before your conclusions, you should have a section (more than one perhaps) describing each change that you considered and revealing its pros and cons—with evidence. Then in your conclusions, you’ll weigh out the pros and cons to determine what any changes seem more important and doable than the others. Those conclusions will then lead into your specific recommendations. Do you see how these report elements force you to lay out your logic for your audience to follow and evaluate? In feasibility reports, the description of alternatives and evaluation of them usually is the longest, most important part of the report because so much else depends on it. For instructors and driving educators, it is recommended that they understand several factors associated with teenage psychology. Risky driving behaviors, such as avoiding the use of seatbelts even when they understand their importance, are often based on psychological rather than logical decisions. Hence, instructors should include creative ways to emphasize the importance of such driving practices. Additionally, teenagers would have better learning ability than an after-hour full-time office worker. Thus, educators should use such strengths of the driving students to their advantage. For technologists, it is recommended that generalized and age-specific solutions be added to the new car designs. For example, for an adult, having a phone holder near the steering wheel could be less distracting than for a teenager. Furthermore, advanced technologies like real-time feedback systems or advanced driving assistance systems (ADAS) can be used to assist in safer driving. For policymakers, several measures are identified that can help improve teen drivers’ safety. Currently, the Graduated Driver Licensing (GDL) enables the state to make laws suitable to different age groups (NHTSA, n.d.). These need to be changed and kept up to date with drivers’ psychology, behavioral and environmental. In this step, instructors and traffic police can provide valuable feedback. Thus, states should implement a system for smooth collection of data and feedback system. Finally, teen drivers have the most responsibility in enhancing their road safety. Learners should pay attention to traffic rules. They can avoid distractions like keeping their phones away from themselves and avoiding the use of loud music or earphones while driving. Furthermore, they should take steps to ensure safety, such as asking for help or supervision when they require it; for example, first time driving in the night-time or on a too busy road. In conclusion, as the problem of young drivers’ safety is a multifaceted one, so should be the solution approach. Hence, all the stakeholders involved should implement changes at their level. Every small improvement in habit, policy, or adherence to rules could save lives. References format/align headings consistently CDC (2022). Teen Drivers and Passengers: Get the Facts, Centers for Disease Control and Prevention. https://www.cdc.gov/transportationsafety/teen_drivers/teendrivers_factsheet.html NHTSA (n.d.). Teen Driving: For Parent. National Highway Traffic Safety Administration, United States Department of Transportation. https://www.nhtsa.gov/road-safety/teen-driving APA style needs correcting. Did you review the feedback on your earlier references assignment? More research is needed (1) to meet the requirements of project 4 (review the assignment carefully) and (2) to satisfy your report audience’s needs. Hussein, I like how you’re grappling with the issue’s complexity. You’re right that there’s not just one fix. You also have used sections to group content in a logical, readable way. Good. While the draft has very strong potential, it is very rushed and underdeveloped. Regarding your comments at the beginning of the draft, I advise narrowing both your audience and your focus so that you can dig into the topics in depth. Maybe start by listing the causes of the problem in one column and ideas for solutions to each in another column. Then narrow your audience (you could target driving instructors/schools OR legislators/lawmakers OR car manufacturers—each of these groups will require different content) and limit your focus to the aspects of the problem and the ideas for solving it that fall under your audience’s control. You can also in your intro acknowledge that the report targets only part of the problem. That will take the pressure off to cover too much too quickly. Even though substantial writing and revision are needed, I see strong p[potential in this draft. I hope that my feedback helps. Rough draft: B (the final draft will obviously be graded much more rigorously)